我们一起坐在台阶上，但David不愿意看我。

2转向David

我转过身，直接盯着他。

3真诚表达

我用低沉但真诚的声音开始说：

4理解感受

“坦白说，如果我是你，我可能也会这么做。

5鼓励坚持

但是，如果我们仅仅因为太担心有人会嘲笑我们就放弃跑步，

6表达观点

我强烈认为这不是一个足够好的理由。

7质问David

你打算让他们阻碍你吗？”

8David回应

听了我的话，他慢慢向我挪了挪身体。

9再次鼓励

“David，如果你真的想跑步，就去做吧。”我补充道。

10等待决定

当David思考时，我屏住了呼吸。

11David决定

然后他看着起跑线，坚定地说：“我要跑。”

12比赛开始

我看着David走到起跑线上。

13枪声响起

发令枪一响，所有选手都冲了出去。

14意外摔倒

但他只跑了几米就绊倒了，重重地摔在地上。

15担心放弃

我的心一沉，因为我真的担心他会放弃。

16开始鼓励

因此我开始大声鼓励，周围其他人也加入了呼喊。

17大家加油

“加油David，你能做到！”

18爬起继续

David爬起来，继续跑，直到冲过终点线，

19获得掌声

迎来了热烈的欢呼和掌声。

20胜负不重要

他是否获得第一名已经不重要了。

21关键品质

是他勇敢的心和坚定的信念最终让不寻常的事情发生了。

我们一起坐在台阶上，但David不愿意看我。我转过身，直接盯着他。我用低沉但真诚的声音开始说：“坦白说，如果我是你，我可能也会这么做。但是，如果我们仅仅因为太担心有人会嘲笑我们就放弃跑步，我强烈认为这不是一个足够好的理由。你打算让他们阻碍你吗？”听了我的话，他慢慢向我挪了挪身体。“David，如果你真的想跑步，就去做吧。”我补充道。当David思考时，我屏住了呼吸。然后他看着起跑线，坚定地说：“我要跑。”

我看着David走到起跑线上。发令枪一响，所有选手都冲了出去。但他只跑了几米就绊倒了，重重地摔在地上。我的心一沉，因为我真的担心他会放弃。因此我开始大声鼓励，周围其他人也加入了呼喊。“加油David，你能做到！”David爬起来，继续跑，直到冲过终点线，迎来了热烈的欢呼和掌声。他是否获得第一名已经不重要了。是他勇敢的心和坚定的信念最终让不寻常的事情发生了。

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David and I sat on steps, and he did not look at me.

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talked, honestly

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I talked to him honestly.

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stop, running, because, laugh, reason

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I said we should not stop running only because others might laugh. It was not a good reason.

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words, felt, better, moved, near

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After my words, David felt better and moved near me.

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told, run, wanted

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I told him to run if he really wanted to.

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made up, mind, run

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At last, he made up his mind to run.

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starting, line, race, began, ran, fast

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David went to the starting line. When the race began, everyone ran fast.

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David, fell, down, soon

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But David fell down soon.

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afraid, stop

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I was afraid he would stop.

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shouted, encourage, cheered

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I shouted to encourage him, and other people cheered too.

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stood, up, finished, race, successfully

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He stood up again and finished the race successfully.

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matter, won

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It did not matter if he won.

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bravery, hope, good, end

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His bravery and strong hope made everything good in the end.

基础分： David and I sat on steps, and he did not look at me. I talked to him honestly. I said we should not stop running only because others might laugh. It was not a good reason. After my words, David felt better and moved near me. I told him to run if he really wanted to. At last, he made up his mind to run.
David went to the starting line. When the race began, everyone ran fast. But David fell down soon. I was afraid he would stop. I shouted to encourage him, and other people cheered too. He stood up again and finished the race successfully. It did not matter if he won. His bravery and strong hope made everything good in the end.
良好分： We sat side by side on the steps, while David refused to look at me. I turned to face him and spoke softly and sincerely. I told him I could understand his feelings, yet we should never give up running just because we feared others’ laughter. Such a reason was not worth stopping him. I asked whether he would let others influence him. After listening carefully, David moved closer little by little. I encouraged him to follow his heart if he really loved running. He thought for a moment, looked at the starting line and decided to have a try.
Then David walked toward the starting line. As soon as the gun sounded, all runners rushed forward at once. Unluckily, David fell down after running a short distance. I felt upset and feared he might give up. So I cheered for him loudly, and soon others joined me together. With our support, David stood up again and kept running until he reached the end, winning warm cheers from all people. In fact, winning first place was not important at all. His courage and strong belief finally helped him achieve something meaningful.
优秀分： We sat together on some steps, but David wouldn't look at me. I turned around and stared at him directly. My low but sincere voice started, "To be frank, if I were you, I might do the same. However, if we give up running simply because we are concerned too much about someone may laugh at us, I strongly hold that's not a good enough reason. Are you going to let them get in your way?" After hearing what I said, he slowly moved his body a little toward me. "David, if you would truly like to run, just do it." I added. I held my breath as David took this in. Then he looked at the starting line and said with a firm determination, "I'm gonna run."
I watched as David moved up to the starting line. Hardly had the starting gun was fired, when all the runners darted out. But he had only gone a few meters before he tripped and fell flat on the ground. My heart sank, for I truly worried he would give up. Therefore I started to shout encouragement, other voices around me took up the call. "Come on David, you can do it!" David picked himself up and started again until he crossed the finish line to wild cheers and applause. It was no more important whether he won the first place or not. It was his brave heart and strong faith that could make something unusual happen finally.